5.11.2010

ok here is chapter 2 of "celtic chaos"!

chapter 2

finally, after organizing all 7 closets in our house and cleaning each sink drain, we got into the car and drove to the airport to pick up innana.
"where is she?" my brother dru asked impatiently(surprise, surprise) "there! in the bright green sweater!" selene yelled as she waved to innana. "ah me, it's sae good to see ye children!"(innana has an irish accent)"ach, selene, arlette, raylynne, lil' gracie, ye've grown sae big! dru, child, yer nearly a man! well we all ahd better get home! ach, sae much work ta do!" (my mother finally got a word in edgewise) "b-but mother, we just want you to come home and relax! there's no work to do!" innana stared at us in surprise."but hasn't bryn talked ta ye? ach, tha' lass! we mus prepare for her weddin'!" mom gasped,"but mother, bryn's wedding isn't till next summer!"
"yer tellin' me she hasn't called ye?"
"no, not a word!"
"well bryn was engaged to drystan, until last month. she told him she didn't want him to celebrate her 37th birthday!"
"you mean he believed her?!?!!?"
"mm-hmm. so she ditched him for dyllon."
"so why do we have to prepare? why isn't she getting married next summer?"
"ahh, drystan was sae angry he said e'd ruin her wedding next year! so she decided to get married next week."
"oh?"
"here."
"oh!"
"at your house!"
"oh, no!"

(end of chapter)

so did you like it? i need your ideas! and comments!!! come on people!!!!!
i will be posting the next chapter tomorrow, along with the next chapter of the "novel" about stardust!!! TTFN!!!!
-macky

1 comment:

  1. McKenna - this is really cool! I love the design of your blog. And this is a neat idea - it's like an online critique group. This is exactly what our critique group does when we meet - share the progress of our stories, give each other feedback and ideas. I like the title "Celtic Chaos," and I love how it begins. Your descriptions are filled with color and good metaphor. I don't have any specifics right now but I will read through again and give you more. CHECK YOUR CAPITALS!

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